Sunday, March 04, 2007

OOOps

I just re-read my AFI post. I saw that I wrote that Havok walked out on the stage, like a man walking on water.

That doesn't make any sense.

He walked out ON THE CROWD, like a man walking on water, the people below him grasping at his ankles and holding him up.

There was a wave, a surge or excitement through the crowd and for a moment, he might have fallen, but his zealots stood firm.

1 comment:

Tim said...

You have some seriously good writing ideas. Great word choice, painting a picture for the reader.